Haiku too

Gallery: LandscapePosted January 21, 2011320 views23 comments

Haiku is a form of Japanese poetry consiting of 17 moras which are similar to our syllables. There are 3 stanzas of 5 then 7 then 5 moras. They are brief which may reflect the Japanese inclusion of the transitory nature of all things in some of their art. In my attempt at minimalism here, the poems came to mind during processing of the image.

You can find more information about Haiku on Wickipedia.

Comments and critiques always welcome, and thanks for looking,

and thank you to all who commented on my last post!

Morris

Comments

23 comments

Comment posted by Eva McDermott on January 21, 2011 at 8:26 PM

I really love and appreciate images like this Morris. I like the elusive detail of the snow and apparent endurance of the grass stalks. A wonderfully beautiful and intimate scene.

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Comment posted by Floris van Breugel on January 21, 2011 at 8:44 PM

The out of focus shading adds a lot for me here, nicely done!

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Comment posted by Dan Baumbach on January 21, 2011 at 9:20 PM

Nice, Morris. I really like the cleanness and simplicity of this.

- Dan.

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Comment posted by Angela Classen on January 21, 2011 at 9:50 PM

Simple but very effective. I like the detail of the swirly snow in the FG. A very elegant image, Morris

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Comment posted by Tony Kuyper on January 21, 2011 at 9:55 PM

NPN pictures
Like the company of friends
Make dinner more fun

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Comment posted by Bruce King on January 21, 2011 at 10:11 PM

You've been hitting a lot of home runs lately Morris. The subtle shadows are really nice. Great eye.

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Comment posted by Bill Chambers on January 21, 2011 at 10:15 PM

Lovely Morris. The FG really makes this sing. Great shot!!

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Comment posted by Craig Myers on January 21, 2011 at 10:22 PM

Just beautiful. I love the way the subtle shadows of the sinuous drifts sort of stairstep one's vision toward the grass stalks.

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Comment posted by Walt Sterneman on January 21, 2011 at 10:26 PM

Ahh I love this shot. I want to be able to do that!

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Comment posted by Preston Birdwell on January 22, 2011 at 12:19 AM

Calligrahic strokes of a fine brush are grasses in the snow.

I really, really like this, Morris.

--P

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Comment posted by Gary Yeoh on January 22, 2011 at 4:20 AM

Morris
You are true poet! - Just fabulous poetry using light and shadow.

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Comment posted by Peter Richter on January 22, 2011 at 5:48 AM

Morris, I admire the weightlessness and simplicity, wonderfully seen!

Peter

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Comment posted by Nils J. Foyn on January 22, 2011 at 7:32 AM

Lovely image with its cleaness and simplicity

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Comment posted by Raymond D Smith on January 22, 2011 at 9:18 AM

Just a wonderful find Morris. A minimalistic photo with a ton to look at. The wind lines just have enough texture and detail and the top fading away in focus is awesome. Not sure if anyone mentioned it or not but there may be a couple of dust spots above the grasses. Cheers

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Comment posted by Anne K. Rusk on January 22, 2011 at 11:18 AM

This is an excellent series you have going here, Morris! These are so well done!

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Comment posted by Morris McClung on January 22, 2011 at 12:08 PM

Thanks for your comments everyone.

Tony, you give a whole new meaning to the term "TV dinner."

I hope it was a good meal.
Thanks, Raymond, I missed those and I'll clean those up.
See you at the shindig, Anne.

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Comment posted by Jim Greenwood on January 22, 2011 at 3:11 PM

Outstanding! The subtle soft detail in the foreground is wonderful. My only suggestion would be to consider perhaps cloning out the shorter stalk on the left.

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Comment posted by Paul Wegemann on January 22, 2011 at 4:48 PM

A fabulous piece of art, Morris! This belongs on your wall.

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Comment posted by Stan Rose on January 22, 2011 at 6:53 PM

I really like this
It is really really nice
Like a fine filet.

That's 5,7,5 for ya.

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Comment posted by Preston Birdwell on January 22, 2011 at 10:58 PM

Jim suggested cloning out the short stalk on the left. In my opinion the short stalk adds balance; with the short stalk, the middle bunch, and the right-most blade, you have a nice triangle that's a counterpoint to the snow V in the foreground.

--P

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Comment posted by Andrew Morrill on January 22, 2011 at 11:37 PM

Very appropriate title. I really love how much volume and form you achieved with so few tones. My only suggestion would be to add a very slight amount of definition at the base of the reeds - as without it they could feel "placed" if that makes sense. -- but I think it does work very well as is.

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Comment posted by Lon Overacker on January 23, 2011 at 8:42 PM

Morris,

Wonderful image
Simple lines beauty and grace
Evokes a quiet calm

Thanks for the Haiku reference Morris - quite fitting for your wonderful image.

Lon

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Comment posted by Morris McClung on January 24, 2011 at 10:04 AM

The winner of the unofficial Haiku contest is Lon. Although Tony's was a strong entry with his NPN reference, and Stan had a perfect kireji (cutting word), Lon's was more aesthetic.

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