I made this image while hanging out in Sonora Pass with Preston, Dan, Lon, Michael, a mellow dog and a couple of wives, not in any particular order. Great group, very fun trip.
I would love some feedback on this. Is it too dark? The focus is fairly shallow, with just the upper edge really sharp. Does that work for you or not? Anything else? Don't be shy, I find brutally honest comments extremely useful.
This is very sensual and mystical. It is a nice take on a common Sierra plant. It looks a tad oversaturated in the cyans, though. I'd love to see a print because it's difficult to make lightness/darkness judgements on a web image due to differences in monitors. I think the selective depth of field works really well, here. Nice job!
-P
Posted by Lon Overacker on July 22, 2008 at 12:23 AM
Harley,
I truly love it. This is a unique and fresh view of the lily - most often we see a more straight-on view with the leaves curling around each other. I really like this perspective. The shallow dof was a great choice here as the tip and edge of the leaf are sharp and hold the interest where it should be.
I don't mind the darker presentation, but do agree with Preston somewhat in that I think I would like more green and less blue/cyan. Just from my recollection of about 36 hours ago, I recall these as being a bit more green/yellow - but certainly not a saturated green. Perhaps the darker exposure changes that a little bit.
I'd say this is quite a successful image. I only wish I had found something like this!
Not knowing what the original looked like, I'd say I like the color hue as is, and the abstract geometry is excelent. I'd say it needs to be dark as you show it to be sensual/mystical.
The first impression/look is quite powerful. The twisting central shape crowned by the linear leaves shooting out has something reminiscing of tibetan/buddhist lotus influence drawings. I think this parallel is what gives this photo a strong first look impact.
I like the softness of the shot, with just enough sharpness to indicate the shot was not blurred, but not enough to make the lines too hash, so it gives an etheral flow.
A very clean and simplistic composition, Harley. As a result, it makes an excellent capture overall, and proves less is more, in this particular case for sure.
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5 repliesI would love some feedback on this. Is it too dark? The focus is fairly shallow, with just the upper edge really sharp. Does that work for you or not? Anything else? Don't be shy, I find brutally honest comments extremely useful.
Chamonix 4x5
Fujinon 240mm
81B
Astia
This is very sensual and mystical. It is a nice take on a common Sierra plant. It looks a tad oversaturated in the cyans, though. I'd love to see a print because it's difficult to make lightness/darkness judgements on a web image due to differences in monitors. I think the selective depth of field works really well, here. Nice job!
-P
I truly love it. This is a unique and fresh view of the lily - most often we see a more straight-on view with the leaves curling around each other. I really like this perspective. The shallow dof was a great choice here as the tip and edge of the leaf are sharp and hold the interest where it should be.
I don't mind the darker presentation, but do agree with Preston somewhat in that I think I would like more green and less blue/cyan. Just from my recollection of about 36 hours ago, I recall these as being a bit more green/yellow - but certainly not a saturated green. Perhaps the darker exposure changes that a little bit.
I'd say this is quite a successful image. I only wish I had found something like this!
Lon
The first impression/look is quite powerful. The twisting central shape crowned by the linear leaves shooting out has something reminiscing of tibetan/buddhist lotus influence drawings. I think this parallel is what gives this photo a strong first look impact.
I like the softness of the shot, with just enough sharpness to indicate the shot was not blurred, but not enough to make the lines too hash, so it gives an etheral flow.